What is the Target here? Why are you not putting Targets but only dates? Targets are critical and must be SMART. Please clarify
\nDean, because I realise you have done the same thing throughout the document, I will end here and simply advise that put clear cut targets for all the cases and resubmit. Please use my work plan as a template. I hope you will understand exactly what I am talking about. If still unclear, please feel free to get in touch.